Text to Hypertext Peer Review, Group 3

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Group 3: Rachel N., Jeffrey M., Amanda D., Matt z.

23 Responses to Text to Hypertext Peer Review, Group 3

    • rachel says:

      Even though technically my essay is already on my portfolio website, here’s a link to the homepage of my portfolio: https://rachelnweb.wordpress.com

    • aderengo says:

      Rachel,

      Starting off with your portfolio page, it appears that you have everything that you need to have. I noticed that you included the links for all your social media sites. I liked that you included them. I like the layout and that you personalized it by putting a picture of yourself on it.

      Moving to your hypertext website, I like the layout that you have. I really like that you linked different articles throughout your pages, giving the reader the option to read more if they wanted to. The information that you included was good. I feel like I got the points that you wanted to get across about good life, virtue, and contemplation. I enjoyed the site.

      Moving to the reflection essay here are my thoughts:
      Great draft!
      ~ The very first sentence sounds funny, consider rewording “The process of turning a words in a row text into a hypertext website”
      ~ Great introduction
      ~ I love the details that you put into the usability testing aspect
      ~ It was very easy to follow along

      If you have any questions let me know. Hope this helps.

    • MattZ says:

      Rachel,

      Portfolio:
      The page looks like you have all the projects ready to go. Great choice of layout and customization. You should have no problems here.

      Essay:
      This is a really solid draft. You do a great job telling about the user testing process and the usual emotional distress that comes with was great and it really gave a good look at your process. I also agree with this project being a lesson in humility.

      Hypertext Page:
      I like the use of a very clean, minimal design. It’s easy to navigate and understand. Adding the extra links to additional material for the reader was a nice touch since it adds that feeling of depth. It was an interesting read. Good job.

    • Steve Krause says:

      I think you have some good comments and feedback here, Rachel. I think what you have right now is pretty solid. I have three minor suggestions. First, I think you need a little more at the first page to contextualize this project. Imagine a reader who just stumbles across this; what would they want to/need to know to make sense of what this is and why it’s here? Second, you should have some kind of “works cited” that also cites your images here.

      As for the 444 website: I think it’s pretty good, though I am personally torn about the duplication of navigation on the first page. What I mean is you have a menu at the top (which seems pretty clear to me) and then you have these big buttons at the bottom (which aren’t as clear to me). I’m not against this necessarily, but I’m not for it either, if that makes sense. Given that your peers don’t seem bothered by it, maybe it’s just me. 😉

  1. MattZ says:

    Here’s the hypertext website for your perusal: https://copyrightorcopywrongblog.wordpress.com/

    And here’s the essay draft: https://writingwithzielesch.wordpress.com/text-to-hypertext-reflections/

    Let me know what you think. I’m open to any and all suggestions for improvement!

    • MattZ says:

      Since I can’t edit my response, here’s a direct link to the homepage of my portfolio:
      https://writingwithzielesch.wordpress.com/

      • rachel says:

        MattZ
        Essay
        In your introduction, I agree that iteration seems to be an apt way to describe the process of this project. Your section on usability testing seems to highlight very well the frustration that goes into drafting and redrafting based on user feedback. Overall, your thoughts seemed to be well-formed. If anything, you might point back to one of the readings once more to give an additional nod to how everything connected together.

        Hypertext Website
        Your homepage certainly gives a nice impression and I applaud your creativity. Your use of a short quote to summarize what the site was about was a creative way to avoid a long and drawn out summary. Looking through your pages, your site looks pretty cleanly designed. You have some great detail on each page, however, it could be argued that you might have a paragraph too many in each section for prolonged reading, despite the quality of the detail. Also, your Sources pages has no sources? If this was intended to be tongue in cheek, I like it.

        Portfolio
        Your portfolio appears to have everything it should. The only thing I can say is that the list of post/pages down the middle of the home page gives it a slight blog feel rather than a homepage.

    • aderengo says:

      Matt,

      Starting off with your portfolio page, it appears that you have everything that you need to have. I thought it was interesting that we both have the same theme for our portfolios.

      Moving to your hypertext website, I think that we have Research Writing together this semester with Professor Miller. I read a paper from a guy named Matt like this. If it is the same person and paper, then I really like how you converted the text into a website. The extra links that you have included were very informative. I really liked that you had a link that allowed us to finish the journey. I think that was a great idea since your topic is very information and text heavy based, it allowed me as the user to look at the pages in a ‘correct’ order so I didn’t miss any information. Make sure that you add your sources to the last page.

      Moving to the reflection essay here are my thoughts:
      Great draft!
      ~ Great introduction
      ~ It was very easy to follow along
      ~ I thought it was creative to explain each step as a version of the website. I think that is what made it so easy to follow along
      ~ In your conclusion, I really like that you mentioned that we can’t get attached to the work that we create if we want to make it better.

      If you have any questions let me know. Hope this helps.

    • Steve Krause says:

      I think you have some pretty decent feedback here already, Matt. I think your website itself is really good, and I like how you have set this up so there is the one page summary/sampling, which then leads to more details (the “read more” part), which then also connects to some really good outside sources. That and the overall look/layout works really well for me. You do need to actually cite your sources, but I suspect that is part of the work in progress part of things. I also think your essay is pretty solid, though I think there are some obvious ways you can make better connections with the readings.

      As for your portfolio page: it’s a little unusual/different from the others in the class in that you took a “blog update” approach to posting about the assignments as they came in, along with the the pages for each assignment. It isn’t exactly what I had in mind in assigning this– note the emphasis I kept returning to in terms of “page” versus “post,” and also the idea of using wordpress as a portfolio rather than a blogging tool. That said, I think the way you are doing this kind of “works.” The main suggestion I have– unless you want to try to convert things more to pages– is that you have one page here someplace that gives us some version of a biography and a purpose for the site, something akin to an “about” page.

  2. aderengo says:

    Here is my portfolio website:
    https://writing444.wordpress.com/

    Here is the hypertext website:
    https://tshirtsandcommunication.wordpress.com/

    Here is the essay draft:
    https://writing444.wordpress.com/text-to-hypertext-reflection/

    Let me know what you think. I am open to any and all comments. Everything will help make them better. My one specific request is the hypertext website. I have had problems articulating what I want to say on here and haven’t gotten the greatest of feedback from my users. Thanks in advance!

    • jmoss9 says:

      Amanda,

      Nice work on everything. I put comments on all three phases in this Google Doc.
      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-jlPMphsqqRupsQmxHjudRJ-sxqfAIUL-3JDz1H26RI/edit?usp=sharing

    • rachel says:

      Amanda D.
      Essay
      Your mention of ultimately choosing WordPress over Weebly does good on inserting some logic of why you chose the platform you did rather than just saying what platform you used. Your usability results of users not knowing what text should be kept, but only knew that there was too much of it was a good highlight of how the burden of choices is on the site creator, and that users are more likely to notice things that don’t work than be able to point out things that do. Overall, very nice. I did notice that you might want to insert a nod or two to the readings we did concerning web design and usability testing to help round it out.

      Hypertext Website
      Visually, your site is appealing. The text you have has been chunked nicely. Some things you might want to consider would be the following:
      A blurb of some kind on your homepage to give a mini-intro of what the site is about.
      Take into consideration that your site pages have a picture take up the entire screen when they first open, and unless the user knows or tries to scroll there isn’t anything telling them that your text is beneath those pictures.

      Portfolio
      Overall, this site has everything it’s supposed to and has some nice colors and fonts that are both appealing and easy on my eyes.

    • MattZ says:

      Amanda,

      Portfolio:
      Everything appears to be in order. Great design that’s easy to read and use.

      Essay:
      I ran into the problem of people saying I had too much text, but not being able to tell me what parts could go, or even what length would be appropriate. Pairing down can be a tough thing to do, especially when you don’t think anything is wrong. I enjoyed the look into why you went with WordPress instead of anything else. Along with the bit about your pre-visualization of the site made it obvious that you put some serious work into this. Might want to look at adding a few things from the readings here and there, though.

      Hypertext Page:
      I like the theming you have going on. It took me a minute to find the text considering there is nothing telling users to scroll down when they first reach the page. You did a good job taking a paper and turning it into a website, but you might want to add a little something to help people understand what you site is all about.

    • Steve Krause says:

      I think your peers gave you some really solid feedback, so pay attention to what they said too. I agree with a couple of folks who said that maybe it is a little too “black and white,” and maybe you should mix up the images for the headers of your pages. Though another way of thinking of it is maybe they should all be the same and you should include some images in the text itself to break it up. I have to say though I think you probably went too far in cutting text despite what your users were telling you. As it is right now, it’s not really that clear to me what this is all about because it has been cut down so much. And I also agree with the comments that there should be some kind of “intro” on the first page, and maybe some additional menu help items since the links at the top get kind of lost to me. I also think you should fix the template here– for example, you don’t have a blog with this site, right? And finally, there are some minor grammar-like things (“I have worked in a small retail chain for five year”) you should fix.

      As for your portfolio: I think it is completely solid. The only thing I would suggest is what can you do with the template image to change it to make it a little more personalized to indicate it’s you?

    • rachel says:

      Jeffrey M
      Essay
      Your initial frustration with WordPress mirrors my own initial frustration with a few of its quirks. Your background info of why you ended up choosing Weebly as your platform as a result was well done. It was nice to hear some detail on how Weebly lets users manipulate things to create websites, since that platform isn’t one I have tried before. Your walk-through of your usability testing and process was well done. Only thing left might be to through a connection to the readings in there.

      Hypertext Website
      Your site setup seems navigable, and the theme of your images is consistent. I’ll say that the fact that stories were what you were pulling from to be the body of your site pages probably makes cutting parts out much harder than what it would have been otherwise. The flow of a story is a delicate thing, and it’s hard to cut and make it shorter without losing something. I feel your pain as a creative writer myself. However, your site pages are incredibly text heavy that warrants a lot of scrolling. The only thing I can think of otherwise is to either transform the stories into vignettes of sorts, or to have a short overview at the top of each page that lets the user decide whether they wish to continue.

      Portfolio
      Seems to have everything you need to have. Well done.

    • aderengo says:

      Jeffrey,

      Starting off with your portfolio page, it appears that you have everything that you need to have. I like the setup that you have.

      Moving to your hypertext website, I really enjoyed reading it. I did think it was a bit text heavy. I agree with Rachel, and that giving readers a summary at the top and the option to read the full text is a way to make it less. Besides that, I thought it was good.

      Moving to the reflection essay here are my thoughts:
      Great draft!
      ~ I liked the background information that you gave for why you switched from using WordPress.
      ~ It was easy to follow along.
      ~ I think all that needs to be done is add a connection to a reading.

      If you have any questions let me know. Hope this helps.

    • MattZ says:

      Jeffrey,

      Portfolio:
      Page looks nice and neat. Everything appears to be in order here.

      Essay:
      As someone who just went with WordPress because it was right in front of me, it was interesting to hear about Weebly and how things work over there. I had quite a bit of trouble getting my page to look like I wanted it to. Thank goodness for YouTube tutorials. The usability testing section was well done and gave a good look at your process. Look at adding some references to the readings somewhere in there and you’d be golden.

      Hypertext Page:
      I liked that you took a story you wrote instead of an essay or more academic paper. I’ve done some creative writing and I can appreciate how difficult it must have been to take that story and put it up on the web in such a way to work with the project. The only thing I wasn’t a big fan of was the fact that I had a large amount of scrolling I had to do. Maybe you could look at a way to either shorten things up, or maybe break it up into more pages.

    • Steve Krause says:

      Interesting work here, Jeff. I think you got good comments from your peers, though I guess I’m not as bothered as some by the “text-heaviness” of it. I will admit that I am mostly looking at this in terms of the layout– I only skimmed the story– but for whatever reason, the fact that it is a lot of words didn’t turn me off much, I guess because you do a lot of breaking it up with images and links and just generally dividing it up. I also like the additional links to things, though I would add a sort of “images cited” section– or at least have links to the images you have borrowed here. The essay you wrote about this is pretty solid too, though I think some clearer connections to the readings might be good. I think you can do that with what you have.

      As for your class portfolio: good work, though I do have one minor quibble, and it’s the sort of thing that when I make web pages drives me nuts. What can you do to have your menu at the top be one line? Maybe just eliminate the contact option entirely?

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